יש לי הערה קטנה על התרגום שלך, אבל בסך הכול הוא טוב.

Yes. Hebrew very often expresses to have with יש ל־ + person.

• יש לי = literally there is to me
• natural English translation: I have

So:

• יש לי הערה קטנה = I have a small comment / remark

This is the normal Hebrew pattern. Hebrew does not usually use a verb equivalent to English have in this kind of sentence.

In Hebrew, adjectives usually come after the noun.

• הערה = comment / remark
• קטנה = small

So:

• הערה קטנה = a small comment

This is the normal word order:

• noun + adjective

Examples:

• ספר טוב = a good book
• ילדה חכמה = a smart girl
• הערה קטנה = a small comment

Because הערה is a feminine noun, and adjectives must agree with the noun in gender and number.

• הערה = feminine singular
• so the adjective must also be feminine singular: קטנה

Compare:

• ספר קטן = a small book (ספר is masculine)
• הערה קטנה = a small remark (הערה is feminine)

So the ־ה ending in קטנה marks the feminine singular form.

Here על means about or regarding.

So:

• הערה קטנה על התרגום שלך = a small comment about your translation

This is a very common use of על:

• שאלה על השיעור = a question about the lesson
• מאמר על היסטוריה = an article about history
• הערה על התרגום = a comment about the translation

Because in Hebrew, a noun followed by a possessive expression like שלך is often made definite.

• התרגום שלך = your translation
• literally: the translation of yours

This is the most standard way to say it.

Compare:

• הספר שלי = my book
• המורה שלנו = our teacher
• הבית שלהם = their house

Sometimes in colloquial Hebrew you may hear forms without ה־, but התרגום שלך is the standard form here.

Because Hebrew possessive phrases of this type usually work as:

• noun + של
  • pronoun

So:

• התרגום שלך = your translation
• החבר שלי = my friend
• הבעיה שלנו = our problem

This is different from English, where the possessive word comes before the noun.

English:

• your translation

Hebrew:

• the translation your / of yours

So the Hebrew order is completely normal.

אבל means but.

It connects two clauses:

• יש לי הערה קטנה על התרגום שלך = I have a small comment about your translation
• אבל בסך הכול הוא טוב = but overall it is good

So אבל introduces a contrast: there is a small criticism, but the overall judgment is positive.

בסך הכול is a common fixed expression meaning:

• overall
• all in all
• on the whole
• sometimes basically, depending on context

In this sentence:

• אבל בסך הכול הוא טוב = but overall it is good

You should learn בסך הכול as a chunk, because its meaning is more idiomatic than word-for-word.

הוא refers to התרגום.

• תרגום = translation, and it is masculine
• so the pronoun is הוא = it / he
• the adjective is also masculine: טוב

So:

• התרגום ... הוא טוב = the translation ... is good

It does not refer to הערה, because הערה is feminine. If it referred to הערה, you would expect feminine agreement, such as היא and probably טובה.

Hebrew often can omit the pronoun in some situations, especially in the present tense, but here הוא makes the sentence clearer and smoother.

• אבל בסך הכול הוא טוב = clear: but overall it is good
• אבל בסך הכול טוב = possible in some contexts, but less explicit

Since there are two nearby nouns, הערה and תרגום, using הוא helps show that the speaker is talking about the translation.

Because טוב describes התרגום, which is masculine.

Agreement in Hebrew works across pronouns and adjectives:

• התרגום = masculine
• הוא = masculine
• טוב = masculine

If the noun were feminine, you would use טובה:

• העבודה טובה = the work is good
• ההערה טובה = the comment is good

It can mean any of those, depending on context.

Common possibilities:

• comment
• remark
• note
• sometimes observation

In this sentence, comment or remark is probably the most natural choice:

• I have a small comment about your translation

The tone is mild and polite, especially because of קטנה.

It usually softens the criticism.

In many contexts, small in English and קטנה in Hebrew do not literally describe physical size. Instead, they make the remark sound less harsh.

So:

• יש לי הערה = I have a comment
• יש לי הערה קטנה = I have a small comment / just a minor comment

This makes the sentence sound more polite and less confrontational.

A natural pronunciation is approximately:

yesh li he-a-RA kta-NA al ha-tar-GUM shel-KHA, a-VAL be-SAKH ha-KOL hu TOV

A few stress notes:

• יֵשׁ = yesh
• הערה = stress on the last syllable: he-a-RA
• קטנה = stress on the last syllable: kta-NA
• התרגום = stress on the last syllable: ha-tar-GUM
• שלך = in masculine singular, usually shel-KHA
• אבל = commonly a-VAL
• בסך הכול = be-SAKH ha-KOL
• טוב = tov

If you are speaking to a woman, note that שלך would be pronounced differently in careful speech: shelakh.

Yes. The part that would clearly change is שלך.

To a man:

• התרגום שלך = your translation

To a woman:

• התרגום שלך as written is the same in modern spelling, but pronounced differently:
  • to a man: shelkha
  • to a woman: shelakh

So the sentence would be written the same, but in speech the possessive form changes.

Everything else in the sentence stays the same, because תרגום is still masculine, so הוא טוב remains the same.